Some of you know that for homework I have to write an anaphoric poem. We got some guidance. At the end of the class we had to write four lines starting You are.. plus an image.
To complete the poem we have to use each of those lines as the first in a verse, a verse of four lines, and then finish with a two line message to the person the poem is about.
I have struggled. I didn’t clean the windows, a favourite task when procrastinating about something, and thank heaven for procrastination or my windows would be forever filthy, but it was a near thing. I now have a draft. I want feedback, not too critical please, but a bit critical to be helpful. So don’t say it’s lovely if you think it’s crap, and please think of a nice way of saying it’s crap if that is your opinion. Of course, if I get no comments I may have to change my name and leave the country.
Basically I am asking you to be kind and constructive. A big ask I know.
You have twenty-four hours. Or so. And I don’t have a title yet either.
You are the thin pink line between night and day
A seam of light.
You are the burnt stubble of a harvested field
A memory of summer.
You are the words of childish goodnights
Don’t let the bugs bite.
You are yourself but less so
Sometimes the fire burns warmest
Before it goes out.